1、高考英语写作冲刺论述文中的审题结构和语言高考英语写作冲刺论述文中的审题、结构和语言1、考点分析 1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 3. 词数少于 80的，从总分中减去2分。 4. 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。 5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影 响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写均可接受。 6. 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。 7. 内容要点可用不同方式表达，对紧
2、扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。第五档(很好)；(21-25分) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。2、专题详解：议论文或论述文写作内容分审题例1：你们学校在高三年级实行周考，每周有四门考试，同学们对此有不同意见。请你根据下表提供的信息给校刊编辑写一封信，客观地介绍情况。70%的同学认为30%的同学认为1.考试考得太多，占用大量上新课的时间1.为对付高考
3、，高三学生需要大量考试2.学生们为考试经常熬夜，身体疲乏2.考试可督促学生用功复习3.建议将周考改为月考3.不应该取消周考审题指导：本题要关注的是最后一句话：客观的介绍情况，所以在写作时不需要写自己的观点，按照表格客观陈述就可以了。第一段可以把文章标题翻译一下，文章第二段写70%同学认为.；第三段写：30%同学认为。例2：描述你在学校的一次午餐，具体要求如下：1.详细描述用餐的情况2.简要表述你对这次午餐的感受审题指导：读题后，定位这篇文章是夹叙夹议的文章。题目一开头出现的“描述”以及要求1中的“详细描述”和要求2中的简要表达二字，可以清楚看出这篇文章以记叙为主，议论为辅。在文章内容安排上要分
4、清主次，不能本末倒置。例3：启事国际儿童基金会将资助中学生开展扶贫项目，以帮助贫困地区的儿童。申请成功者将获得项目经费2000元。有意者请来信告知：1） 你个人的基本情况；2） 你对申请项目的基本设想；3） 项目经费的使用计划。联系方式: 2017hopeicf.org 2017年6月7日审题指导：本题由于要求明确，所以审题相对简单。1、2、3点构成文章的三个段落。第一段写个人的基本情况，第二段写你对申请项目的基本设想，第三段写项目经费的使用计划。但是要注意判断出文章的主体段是第2个要求，对申请项目的基本设想。在要求明确的情况下，要注意要点全面、突出重点。例4： 假设你是中华中学学生姚平，最近
5、参加了一项研究性学习调研，课题为“父母是否以子女为荣”。通过调研你校学生及其父母，结果发现双方对此问题的看法有差异（数据如图所示）。根据图表写一份报告，在报告中，你必须：1. 描述调研数据；2. 分析可能导致这一结果的原因。分析审题：结构分： 学校即将举办“读书节”，目前正广泛征集“读书节”宣传册图片。假设你是该校学生潘阳，你已找到以下三幅图片，决定给读书节组委会写一封信，推荐其中一幅，你的信须包括以下内容：1. 简单描述你想推荐的那幅图片；2. 阐述你用这幅图片宣传“读书节”的理由。作文范文：Dear Sir/ Madam,Since the Reading Festival is arou
6、nd the corner, Im writing to recommend a picture which can be used in the brochure to remind the students of the pleasure of reading.In the picture, three students are sitting at the table, discussing heatedly what they have just read. It seems that they have had a lot of fun through the discussion.
7、 Though it is admitted that reading is mostly a personal activity which needs quietness and concentration, as far as Im concerned, it can also be a sharing experience when the same book is being appreciated. Just imagine that you have read a terrific detective story with fascinating and intricate pl
8、ots. You are so amazed by the genius of the writer and you cant help sharing it with your classmates or best friends, who turn out to have been deeply impressed as well. The moment you mention the book, the passion and enthusiam about the story will explode which can never be gained on your own. My
9、ideal atmosphere of reading is just like that, through which you can not only appreciate the content by yourself, but also have the pleasure of sharing the plots or opinions with your peers, which will ultimately enhance your understanding of the book. To sum up, the reason of my recommendation is q
10、uite simple and apparent that reading, instead of being dull and isolating, can be full of particiation and common interest. I sincerely hope that you will take my suggestion into consideration and Im looking forward to your early reply.Yours，Pan Yang语言分：Studying Abroad: Hardships and Rewards. You s
11、hould write at least 150 words:1. 出国留学有很多好处2. 出国留学也会遇到很多难题3. 你的选择【学生习作】Studying abroad has many advantages. In the first place, from studying abroad, I can learn a lot of things. If we dont go abroad,we may lose many chance to study. Second, while we study in a foreign country, we can travel widely,
12、 visit famous place. Thirdly we can use the foreign language in our daily life so that our ability in the second language may be improved quickly. However, there are also some disadvantages. As we all know, many people cant speak English. As a result, when they arrive there, they will find it diffic
13、ult to understand others. for lack the customs and way of life of the local people, they may met with trouble. therefore, misunderstandings often happen. Therefore, studying abroad has advantage and disadvantage.In my opinion, I like study aboard because I want to learn more.【点评】该篇文章没有做到语言正确性、逻辑性、句式
14、多变性和思想性。文章有多处语法错误；而且连接词用法混乱；句式过于单一，没有用到高级句式：倒装、非谓语、独立主格、排比、强调句型等高级句型；结尾也过于单调，缺乏思想性。【改进建议】1.正确性：避免语法或则拼写错误，低级的错误增加了作文得极低分数的风险。2.逻辑性：过渡语可以用高级过渡语；每段都应有主题句。主题句点明段落主题，概括段落的中心思想。有了主题句，然后是分论点1，分论据1；分论点2，分论据2。3.句式太过于单一，可尝试把简单句改成高级句式：如，非限制性定语从句、非谓语动词、倒装、强调句型、排比和独立主格等，使文章句式灵活多变，更加有文采；多用一些高级短语，使语言更加丰富。建议写作模板：
15、模版一： The topic of (主题)is becoming more and more popular recently. There are two sides of opinions about it. Some people believe that观点A They hold the view for the reason that (支持A的理由一). What is more, (理由二). Moreover, (理由三). While others think that观点B is a better choice in the following three reasons
16、. To begin with, (支持B的理由一). Furthermore (Besides), (理由二). In addition (Finally), (理由三). From my point of view, / As a matter of fact, / In my view, / Personally speaking, I agree to the thought that(我的观点) , Therefore, the former / the latter is surely a wise choice for me. 模版二： There is a widespread
17、 concern over (the issue that)(作文题目). But it is well known that the opinion concerning this hot topic varies from person to person. A majority of people think that(观点一). In their view，there are two factors contributing to this attitude as follows: in the first place, (原因一). Furthermore, (In the seco
18、nd place), (原因二). So it goes without saying that( 观点一). People, however, differ in their opinions on this matter. Some people hold the idea that(观点二). In their point of view, on the one hand, (原因一). On the other hand, (原因二). Therefore, there is no doubt that(观点二). As far as I am concerned, I firmly
19、support the view that(观点一或二). It is not only because (原因一), but also because(原因二). The more , the more. 模版三： Nowadays, _is becoming more and more popular, especially in _. Obviously, it is widely believed there are several positive aspects as follows. _论点1_._论据1_ . Whats more, _论点2. _论据2_. However,
20、Just As a popular saying goes, every coin has two sides, _话题_ is no exception, and in another word, it still has negative aspects. To begin with, _缺点一_. In addition, _缺点二_. Therefore, _ should be viewed as a two-edged sword, which presents us with both benefits and troubles. The best policy, as I se
21、e it, is to take into consideration _and_. Personally, I choose_.【修改过程】1.In the first place, from studying abroad, I can learn a lot of things. If we dont go abroad, we may lose many chance to study. 修改后： In the first place, studying abroad can widen our vision and broaden our minds. student can hav
22、e access to advanced science and technology and be exposed to entirely new ideas and trends , which will benefit us a lot in the future.(非限制定语从句）2.Second, while we study in a foreign country, we can travel widely, visit famous place. 修改后：While studying in a foreign country, we can travel widely, vis
23、iting famous scenic spots and making friends with the local people. （非谓语动词）3.However, there are also some disadvantages.修改后：Nevertheless, as every coin has two sides, studying abroad also confronts one with a series of hardships.（谚语）4.As we all know, many people cant speak English. As a result, when
24、 they arrive there, they will find it difficult to understand others.修改后：For one thing, the most serious problem is the language barrier. Most of the students who are ready to go abroad dont have a good command of English and as a result, on arriving there, they will find it difficult to communicate
25、 with the local people,.（非谓语动词和定语从句）5.for lack the customs and way of life of the local people, they may met with trouble. therefore, misunderstandings often happen. 修改后：For another, a completely new environment with different customs and habits may also be a barrier to overseas students, especially
26、 to the young. 【改后作文】 There is no doubt that studying abroad is a hot topic today. Obviously, studying abroad has a number of advantages. In the first place, studying abroad can widen our vision and broaden our minds. Students can have access to advanced science and technology and be exposed to enti
27、rely new ideas and trends , which will benefit them a lot in the future. In the second place, while studying in a foreign country, we can travel widely, visiting famous scenic spots and making friends with the local people. Last but not least, by living and studying in a foreign country, one can imp
28、rove his foreign language much faster than at home.Nevertheless, as every coin has two sides, studying abroad also confronts one with a series of hardships. For one thing, the most serious problem is the language barrier. Most of the students who are ready to go abroad do not have good command of En
29、glish and as a result, on arriving there, they will find it difficult to communicate with local people. For another, a completely new environment with different customs and habits may also be a barrier to overseas students, especially to the young. An added difficulty is money: it can cost a lot to
30、study abroad.Therefore, studying abroad should be viewed as a two-edged sword, which presents us with both benefits and troubles. The best policy, I think, is to take into consideration his financial conditions and his ability to adapt to new surroundings. Personally, If finance permitting, I choose to go abroad and study .练习：一：有人认为高中生在校交不到真心朋友，因为大家忙于学习，又互相竞争，而有些人认为高中可以交到真心朋友，一起度过辛苦的三年学习，你的看法是什么，并阐明你的理由高中是否可以交到真心朋友。120字到150字_
