1、英语九年级上册英语书面表达易错剖析及解析【英语】九年级上册英语书面表达易错剖析及解析一、英语书面表达1Life is just like a mirror, you smile at it, and it smiles at you, too. 请你以“Learn to Smile”为题,根据下表所列的要点写一篇100词左右的文章(文章开头已给出)。学会对自己微笑1、面对困难与烦恼学会微笑(考试失利、被别人误解等)。2、使你自信,击败你的人有时就是你自己。3、有益于身心健康。学会对他人微笑1、便于与他人之间的交流。2、给别人带来快乐,自己也快乐。微笑是一种语言人人都能懂,传递友谊,拉近距离。1
2、、参考词汇: 对某人微笑 smile at sb. 误解 misunderstand2、短文必须包括所有内容要点,不要逐字翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯通顺。 Learn to SmileI remember a song by Westlife, the first sentence of it is “Just a smile and the rain is gone.” Do you like smiling? I think you should learn to smile ._【答案】Learn to SmileI remember a song by Westlife, the f
3、irst sentence of it is “Just a smile and the rain is gone.”Do you like smiling? I think you should learn to smile .First, learn to smile at yourself when something unpleasant happens in your life. If you fail an exam or you are misunderstood by your friends, dont be sad. Just smile at yourself . Smi
4、ling at yourself brings back your confidence . Sometimes the one who beats you is not others, but yourself. And smile can also keep you healthy. Second, learn to smile at others. It will make you communicate better with people. Smiling at others makes yourself happy as well. In a word, smile is a ki
5、nd of language belonging to everyone. It passes love and friendship and helps shorten the distance between you and other people. Living with a smile ,every day will be shiny.【解析】这是一篇表格式的作文,要点是一表格的形式出现,首先要研究表格,找出需要表达的要点,然后加以整合,也可以适当增加使意思更连贯,但要点一定要全,不能漏掉。写作时要注意遣词造句,不能受汉语的影响,要用地道的英语表达,注意时态,语态,单词拼写,语法等问
6、题,用好简单句,适当用复杂句。可以用一些高级词汇。还要注意句子的关联。2书面表达根据要求完成短文写作,请将作文写在答题卡指定的位置上。每年春节,每个孩子都能收到来自长辈的压岁钱(lucky money)。随着生活水平的提高,大部分孩子得到越来越多的压岁钱,有些甚至通过微信(WeChat)或支付宝(Alipay)收压岁钱。同学们该如何管理自己的钱,让自己的钱用得更有意义?请结合自己的实际写一篇文章,词数 80 词以上,文中不能出现真实校名和人名。内容包括如下:1. 你的压岁钱的来源和用途;2. 对合理使用压岁钱的建议(至少 3 点);3. 呼吁大家节约用钱,把自己的压岁钱用在最需要、最有意义的地
7、方。【答案】Every Spring Festival I receive a lot of lucky money from my parents and relatives. Now I even get it through WeChat or Alipay. I usually buy some of my favorite books, school things and some fancy clothes. Sometimes I also buy some gifts for my parents.In order to make good use of the lucky m
8、oney, I think we can do the following things. First, we should save part of the money for our study instead of wasting it on video games. Second, it is a good idea to buy something useful for our parents or teachers so that we can show our love to them. What is more, why not donate our lucky money t
9、o the poor kids in need? Helping others makes us happy.All in all, let us manage our lucky money properly. We should use our money in a meaningful way.【解析】【详解】每年春节,每个孩子都能收到来自长辈的压岁钱(luckymoney)。随着生活水平的提高,大部分孩子得到越来越多的压岁钱,有些甚至通过微信(WeChat)或支付宝(Alipay)收压岁钱。同学们该如何管理自己的钱,让自己的钱用得更有意义?这是一篇给材料作文,本题所给材料比较详细,写作
10、中注意将所给内容表达出来,不能逐字翻译。通过阅读材料可知这篇短文主要使用的人称就是第一人称,时态为一般现在时态,注意谓语动词的变化。动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲,写作中注意语义通顺,符合逻辑关系。上下文之间可以适当使用连接词。【点睛】文章使用了很好的短语和句子:In order to make good use of the lucky money, I think we can do the following things. First, we should save part of the money for our study instead of wasting it on v
11、ideo games.这些给文章增色不少。3书面表达假如你是李华,你们学校正在进行课堂教学改革,经过一段时间的适应,同学们发现现在的课堂跟以前比较发生了一些变化,请你根据所给提示以“The Changes in Class”为题目,用英语写一篇100词左右的文章,谈谈你的感受和想法,开头和结尾已给出(不计入总词数)。 要求:1.短文应行文连贯、条理清晰、段落分明、书写工整;2.文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名等信息;3.文章必须包括所提供的全部主要信息,并作适当发挥。The Changes in ClassThanks for giving us students a chance to ex
12、press ourselves about how we study in class._【答案】 The Changes in ClassThanks for giving us students a chance to express ourselves about how we study in class. I like the class like this.I think it is very interesting and lively. We can tell stories, play games and listen to music.I think it is open
13、and free. We can study and think by ourselves .We can discuss in groups and show ourselves. We can get more knowledge in this class. The changes in Class are good for us.【解析】【详解】假如你是李华,你们学校正在进行课堂教学改革,经过一段时间的适应,同学们发现现在的课堂跟以前比较发生了一些变化,请你根据所给提示以“The Changes in Class”为题目,用英语写一篇100词左右的文章,谈谈你的感受和想法,开头和结尾已
14、给出(不计入总词数)。 结合所给材料,可知本文主要考查一般现在时,人称为单数第一人称,注意主谓一致问题,句子结构主要为系表结构,注意一些常见句式的应用,写作中注意运用代词,注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序,符合逻辑关系。【点睛】本文结构紧凑,语言简练文中运用了一些好的句型:We can study and think by ourselves .We can discuss in groups and show ourselves. We can get more knowledge in this class.等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。4 书面表达共享单车(shared bi
15、kes)在苏州投入使用以来,给人们带来了诸多便利,受到人们的追捧,改变了人们的出行方式,但同时也遇到了一些挑战,是国民素质的“照妖镜”,请你根据表格中信息的提示,给21世纪英文报写一篇关于共享单车看法的稿件。社会现状自从出现,饱受赞誉。诸多优势1.随处可见,出行方便2.有益健康,减少污染 3.费用不高,负担得起存在问题1.未及时归还2.占道挡路 你的观点我认为(考生自拟,至少2点)注意事项:1.短文须包括表格中所有提示内容,要求语句通顺,意思连贯。2.表格中“你的观点”一栏用23句话展开合理想象。作适当发挥。3.词数在90个左右,文章的开头部分已给出,不计入总词数。Shared bikes a
16、re becoming more and more popular in our daily life. 【答案】Shared bikes are becoming more and more popular in our daily life. They have won high praise since they appeared.Shared bikes have brought us many advantages. They can be seen everywhere so that its easy for us to get around on shared bikes. A
17、lso, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. Whats more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford it.But there are some problems too. Some people cant return shared bikes in time. Sometimes shared bikes take up too much of the road, so they ar
18、e in our way.I think we should encourage more people to use shared bikes properly. After all, its a way of living a green life.【解析】这篇作文要求我们给21世纪英文报投稿,谈一谈自己对共享单车的看法。题目中利用表格的形式给我们列举了短文的主要内容,包括:共享单车的优势;存在的问题以及你自己对这件事情的看法。前两个内容我们需要根据表格的提示用正确的英语表达,而自己的观点则需要学生们自己发挥想象力,组织语言,并表达出来,要求至少两点。通过审题可知,这篇短文应主要使用一般现
19、在时态,第三人称来叙述,短文可以分成两段或者三段,一个内容一段或前两个内容合到一段。写作时,应注意英语表达习惯和汉语的不同,不能逐词翻译,而应从句子的整体考虑,简单句、并列句和复合句交叉使用,改变文章句式节奏,使用不同的句式,避免单调。语句之间注意使用恰当的连接成分,使整篇文章意思连贯、表达流畅。点睛:这是一篇优秀的作文。首先短文内容完整,包含了题目要求的所有信息。短文分成了四段,第一段引出话题共享单车;第二段讲述了共享单车的一些优点;第三段介绍了一些问题;最后一段作者提出了自己的看法。分段叙述使文章的结构清晰,主题明确,有层次性。其次短文中使用了恰当的时态和人称,文章以第三人称、一般现在时态
20、为主,语法规范,用词准确,句式富于变化。例如They can be seen everywhere so that its easy for us to get around on shared bikes. Also, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. Whats more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford it.这几个长句;另外文章中还使用了恰当的连接成分,如Also, Whats
21、more, But, sometimes, After all等等。正确文章行文连贯、语句通顺、表达流畅。5自信赋予人力量,带给人快乐。拥有自信,人生处处是舞台,生活越来越精彩。假如你是李华,请你为校刊英语园地“自信助我成长”专栏写一篇短文,谈谈自信的重要性,分享一次使你更加自信的经历,并说说我们如何更加自信。提示词语:powerful,happy,believe in,keep doing提示问题:Why is it important to be confident?What experience made you more confident?How can we become more
22、 confident?Its very important to be confident【答案】Its very important to be confident. Self-confidence can bring us courage to stick to what we do. So its valuable to us.When I was in Grade 7, once my teacher asked me to make a speech in class. Although I practiced it for many times at home, I still f
23、elt nervous and forgot thewords at the beginning of it. Then I breathed deeply and relaxed myself. You cant believe how happy I was when I recalled the speech and finished it successfully.My teacher thought highly of my performance and I got much encouragement from my classmates. From then on, I hav
24、e become more and more confident.To build confidence, firstly we need to clearly know about our own advantages and try to develop them. It is the most important that we should put in enough effort to what we do. Then we can finally make it and gain more confidence.【解析】本文内容应包含表格中所提供的所有信息。灵活运用各种句式,采用不
25、同的表达方式将各个要点完整地表述出来,注意主次分明,详略得当。语言力求准确,简洁。最后必须认真查验是否有漏写,有无拼写错误及标点误用等。点睛:这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语,为文章增色不少,如at the beginning of; know about;make a speech等;When ;Although ;Then ;From then on,等的运用,使文章的表达更有逻辑性,更富有条理;同时语言流畅,内容完整,是一篇不错的范文。6假设你是Beth,前段时间曾向英语校刊投送一篇题为My English Teacher Miss Zhang的短诗。近日,又至毕业季,师生们忙着互致临
26、别赠言。为此,编辑部策划开“A Letter to My Teacher”专栏,邀请你以信件的形式重新投稿。短诗如下:My English Teacher Miss ZhangThere is a teacher, Miss Zhang,Who is friendly, patient and helpful.Always encouraging us to try,She leads us to a world of why.We all respect and admire her. 注意事项:1.稿件内容须根据短诗展开合理想象,不得抄写短诗原文:2.要求语句通顺、意思连贯、符合情境。3.词数在70个左右,稿件的首尾已在答题卡上给出,不计入总词数:4.稿件必须写在答题卡指定的位置上。_【答案】Dear Editorial Office,I am writing to recommend as The Most Popular TeacherShe is Miss Zhang.She is my English teacher She is in her forties Her small round glasses make her look smart She often works to high standards and is w